Poetry Corner

[Ally_Kat]

Originally posted by pete
wow

that is sooo bad

I bet you can't tell me what kind of poem that is and what you're suppose to do with it.

[Rikk]

ALLY, you have some good shit. Keep it going.

[pete]

Originally posted by Ally_Kat
I bet you can't tell me what kind of poem that is and what you're suppose to do with it.

I know what you should do with it.

[Dan]

I sit here all alone
Maybe someone will call me on the phone
been waiting here in the cold
holy shit I'm getting old
Not to sure what to write
now it's time to say goodnight

By Dan

[Ally_Kat]

Originally posted by Rikk
ALLY, you have some good shit. Keep it going.

I don't have too many poems; Just what I had to do for my one creative writing class and she had us do all these different styles, so they're not the traditional sing-song ones. I'm more a fiction writer. Once I get published, I'll be whoring out the book here.

[Ally_Kat]

Originally posted by pete
I know what you should do with it.

yes, yes, and where's your work?

[pete]

Originally posted by Ally_Kat
yes, yes, and where's your work?

look closer.

I appreciate your arrogance of poetic form.

It is the content that lacks.

It may speak to adolescense, but universal... it is not.

[Rikk]

Here's a song my band recorded pretty recently...it's got four fingerpicked electric guitars with reverb, plus a bass and multi-layered harmony vocals that I recorded...

Watch yourself, and don't forget,
to put out your last cigarette.
Oh friends may come and friends may go,
but in the end this is your show.
But now, someone's gotta cheer you up,
cuz someone's left you here for dead,
and you've just got a tiny room, here.
Here in 1975.

[Ally_Kat]

Originally posted by pete
look closer.

I appreciate your arrogance of poetic form.

It is the content that lacks.

It may speak to adolescense, but universal... it is not.

Sure, pete. Whatever you say, pete. You're doing this just to stir shit, pete.

Just so you know, the poem you say sucks is a riddle poem. It's not suppose to contain any great meaning or be something you sit and ponder about 20 yrs from now. It's suppose to be a cute short thing where you can guess what it's about.

And why does poetry have to be serious? Why can't it just be fun? Life (and this message baord) is full of too much drama. Sometimes cute, throw-away entertainment is nice.

[pete]

Who turns the wheel?
The soul, the time
Who keeps the greens green despite the steel outside?
Who hears the lessons
from deep within their graves?
Who commands the loss of lost
from the bullets of the saved?

Who brings the karma?
Who holds the grace?
Who heals the wounds of love smarting on the face of this?
Whom do you call out
wehen down on your knees?
Who do you beg for hope of peace
and some kind of sympathy?

It's true blue baby in your sight
I'm holding out for something that I can't see for light
I'm true blue baby in your sight

[pete]

Originally posted by Ally_Kat
Sure, pete. Whatever you say, pete. You're doing this just to stir shit, pete.

Just so you know, the poem you say sucks is a riddle poem. It's not suppose to contain any great meaning or be something you sit and ponder about 20 yrs from now. It's suppose to be a cute short thing where you can guess what it's about.

And why does poetry have to be serious? Why can't it just be fun? Life (and this message baord) is full of too much drama. Sometimes cute, throw-away entertainment is nice.

You are an idiot

I've posted two things here.

If I'm stirring shit.

Well, that shit is you.

[pete]

Originally posted by Ally_Kat


And why does poetry have to be serious? Why can't it just be fun? Life (and this message baord) is full of too much drama. Sometimes cute, throw-away entertainment is nice.

It doesn't

It just should speak to anyone who reads it.

Not just the tele-tubby demographic.

Why don't you just go over to chelle's and spill some more, stupid, mod room, bullshit?

Now that's stirring shit, shit.

[Ally_Kat]

Rikk, I'm sorry about the thread. I'll leave it now since my musings aren't mature enough to fit into the thread.

[Dan]

I'm cold
My Heart is dead
skin is grey
smells really bad
time has stopped
there's no sound
mouth is dry
I'm not alive

By Dan

[pete]

Originally posted by Ally_Kat
Rikk, I'm sorry about the thread. I'll leave it now since my musings aren't mature enough to fit into the thread.

Don't take it like that.

You an I never had issues - at least in front of my back.

I know you have to keep up appearances to retain your precious status.

You struck blindly and idiotically, and I retaliated.

Stir shit?

please.

I still talk to SARGE.